Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been widely argued that destitution in undeveloped

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cannot be resolved merely by financial aid from wealthy

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rich

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can help the poorer ones fix

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fiscal problem, which leads me to agree with

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statement. It is understandable

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why developed

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financially

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impoverished

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in order to solve their poverty problem as financial

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can help them be able to manage it themselves.

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, they might spend on funding in promoting tourism or

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international

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government

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governments

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cannot tackle well enough to solve poverty matters, leading me to suggest

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countries

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support

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the impoverished

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are experiencing

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inequality in

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, which is undeniably a major cause to

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exacerbate

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of proper

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among

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has led them to lack

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and proper knowledge to get a job, some

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eventually become homeless.

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, providing them

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equal educational

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enough money to survive and treat their own family.

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, affluent

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can facilitate the undeveloped

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by funding

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health

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enhancement so that they will be capable of having

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affordable or free

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care

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. Take Thailand, my country,

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; disadvantaged Thai

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have been undergoing

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unaffordable and

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inaccessible

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health

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care

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, which

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them to spend

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vast majority of their money to

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proper

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care

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even if they only get sick, not a big surgery.

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, prosperous

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can

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the impoverished ones by subsidizing their main exported products

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as agricultural products etc., resulting in which their population will still have their own jobs which can decrease

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rate and simultaneously, get properly paid by their

valueable

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valuable

job. I,

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, totally agree with the statement that

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countries

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can

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the impoverished ones by other approaches than

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solely

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. In conclusion, I agree with the statement that developed

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are supposed to provide other types of

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poor

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rather than financial

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. Despite financial

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wealth

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countries

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are able to help the poorer

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several approaches, which are improving their

education

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for their

people

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enbling

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enabling

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them to

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access

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education

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equally; enhancing

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health

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care

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system to allow impoverished

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access

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it more and

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not have to spend lots of their money on it; supporting their exported products so that they can get paid properly.

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poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
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