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Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The diagram illustrates information about the transport system used by students when going to
school
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 between the years 1990 and 2010.
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, it is crystal clear from the chart that travelling by car became popular with time.
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, a majority of learners used cars and feet when going to
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while
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 a small percentage preferred cycling.
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 with, in 1990, most individuals walked to
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 with about 13 million (
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) trips made in that year which was the highest ever recorded. During the same period, a significant number of students used
buses
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 (about 7m), bikes (just above 6m), cars (approximately 4.2m) and some
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 both feet and
buses
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 (just below 6m). Coming to a decade later, the figure of those walking to
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 dropped with more than half to 6 million trips that year.
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 the figures of students using feet went down, cars became a popular mode of transport. Children who used
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 and walked at the same time remained a minority just like the ones who used bicycles. The total number of trips made by
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 to and from
school
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 remained relatively low in 2010 as compared to 1990.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • camaraderie
  • workplace morale
  • interpersonal relationships
  • cohesive
  • collaborative
  • recharge
  • detach mentally
  • professional demeanor
  • conflict of interest
  • stress reduction
  • informal setting
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