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The map below show the centre of a small town Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the centre of a small town Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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signify
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 the narrowly developed
centeric
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central
 area
while
 another shows well customise plans. Basic attributes of
map
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the map
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, the present
map
 doesn't seem
systematicly
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systematically
 developed.
However
,
the
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another
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map
 is
well planned
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well-planned
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. Presently, the streets are one-way but, the authorities aimed to construct the roads as dual
carriageway
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carriageways
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 in order to provide wider and better connectivity. As of now, the shops
are build
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 on
the
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both sides of
roads
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. When you take
glance
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 at
planned
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the planned
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 town, the main street has been converted to pedestrians and it follows the modern construction of bus stations,
shopping
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centre
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centres
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, car parking and some modern housing.
Current
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map
 shows
countryside
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the countryside
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on
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 the north,
in contrast
no
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 countryside, that area has been modernised with
convince
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 facilities. To
sump
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sum
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 up, we can a lot of variance on both the planned- charts of
small
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the small
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 town
center
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centre
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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