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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case?what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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In
this
 day and age the vast majority of
people
 prefer to
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job
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 for themselves and
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a
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business
leader
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 than
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an employee. The origins of
this
 situation seem to stem from several factors,
while
 problems can
also
 be found. To commence with, private and small businesses accomplishing by beginners cuse 80% of economic progress.
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, the government supports high - educated by subsiding facilities to
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 them
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 a
business
.
Therefore
, individuals will find far more career progression and job prospects by being an entrepreneur.
A
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 example can be seen in affluent countries where the government provided either
loan
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 or financial
payment
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 by assisting banks as incentives for the graduated or elites.
Moreover
,
people
 are working long hours in many companies these days and with
a
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low-level pay increments or financial rewards. Asa
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, their work/life balance is affected. Having no job satisfaction
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 them to quit.
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, many employees believe that working for others
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 them to stress and redundancy.
On the other hand
,
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 a
business
 has its own drawbacks as well. Strong management and employing the right and productive
people
 are
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significant
key
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 in
this
 case
otherwise
, the brand probably
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 to failure. Statistics show more than half of companies will
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 risks
such
 as bankruptcy in the early years of
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.
Furthermore
, being a
business
 leader has increased the level of stress and pressure.
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,
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 of responsibility and duty will
be
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rose if you be a chairman. For illustrate, an employee may need to respond to their boss,
while
 a
business man
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 has huge duty
for
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 their employees, company and society at the same
times
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. Having
weighted
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 up all the
argument
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,
people
 tend to have their own brand
due to
 the
government
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encouragements
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 on one hand, and
destruction
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 of their work/life balance as
a
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 employee
on the other hand
.
However
,
along with
 these dealing with a
business
 is not
with
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lack of difficulties.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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