Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor

Today, some
countries
introduced
the
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anti-smoking
tabaco
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tobacco
law
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laws
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so as to prevent
health
issues among the citizens,
although
some
countries
believe that
its
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it is
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personal
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a personal
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choice for their freedom,
government
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don’t
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to
do
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some
regulation
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regulations
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against
the
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tobacco. In
this
essay, we will consider both sides of
discussion
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the discussion
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. I personally that tobacco users should be banned from
the
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public
places
such
as offices and restaurants,
and its
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as it is
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harmful
for
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others
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others'
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health
.
Hence
, it is totally acceptable in these
countries
to
smoke
in public
places
. For instance, in Taiwan, there are many bars and
nigh
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night
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club can
smoke
inside,
due to
the cigarette companies’ lobby.
On the other hand
, regardless of being totally acceptable in some
places
, smoking in public areas is banned in many
countries
all over the world because it is dangerous for people’s
health
.
However
, smoking fumes are very hurtful for smokers themselves
also
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and also
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for people who do not
smoke
.
May scientifically
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research
show
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that most of the victims of lung diseases
caused
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by
smoke
and
also
for
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passive smokers.
Usually
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passive smokers are children,
woman
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women
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and pregnant women, and it’s clear that children can use these negative images as their role models to imitate and become addicted to smoking. It illustrates that society should be protected from the harmful influence of smoking products to make society healthier.
To conclude
, I would tend to side with
countries
were have anti-smoking in public
places
. It would be the best decision which would be beneficial for citizen’s
health
.
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