The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the
percentage
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of
households
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with electrical appliances and the number of hours of housework per week per household. The
percentage
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of
households
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with washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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increased from 1920 to 2019. The growing
percentage
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of
households
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with
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the refrigerator
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was the most dramatic, it climbed from almost 0% to 100% in sixty years. After 1980, every family had refrigerators. The
percentage
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of
households
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with vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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rose steadily and hit the peak point
at
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100% in 2000. The growth of
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percentage
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the percentage
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of
households
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mashine
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machine
was
flunctuant
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fluctuant
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. It went up from 40%, in 1920 to 70%, in 1960 and dropped back to 65% in 1980. After 1980, the trend went upward. The number of hours of housework per week decreased from 1920 to 2019. It dropped significantly in the first two years and it slipped lightly from 1960 to 2019.
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conclusion,
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the
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of
households
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with electrical appliances grows, the number of hours of housework per household
declined
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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