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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table and chart provide information regarding
population
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 growth and the proportion of the
population
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 over 65 over a 100-year period in
Japan
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.
According to
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 the information.
Japan
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's general
population
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 figures in 1950 were very different from those in 2005 and future predictions show even greater differences. In 1950, the number of
people
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 was just over 84
million
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, and only 4.9
percent
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per cent
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 (4.1
million
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) of these
people
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 were above the age of 65. By 2005, the percentage of older
people
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 had risen considerably to 20
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 the
overall
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population
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 had shown a parallel increase to nearly 128
million
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However
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, total
population
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 figures peaked in 2005. and
if
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it
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 is expected that the number of
people
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 living in
Japan
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 will fall substantially over the next 50 years to a little below 90
million
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. In spite of
this
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 fall, the rise in the ageing
population
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 will continue, and at a faster rate, so that by 2055, 41
percent
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per cent
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 (36.5
million
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) of Japanese
people
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 will be over 65. These statistics show two contrasting trends in
Japan
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's demographics that will result in fewer citizens, but greater numbers of elderly
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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