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Today different types of robots are being developed which can serve as companions and workers to help at work and at home.

#robots #companions #workers #work #home
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 development because if
robts
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robots
robot's
work
 for
people
 and
people
 will
out
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 of
work
 but there is a useful side.
The
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 application of them can do good in different fields in
the
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modern life. But it is
harmfully
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 for
people
 most
people
work
 for the company.
For example
, in India and Japan, 30% of
people
work
 in different companies but in
America
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 there are already
robots
 that
work
 in the place of
people
 because of
this
, there is not a large percentage of working
people
 in America
for example
 20% or 15%
people
 who
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is
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work
 in
company
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a company
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 But even we have
robots
. If we think Ower
this
 issue, we will realize that we have already
robots
at
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 our houses. They do not only come in the shape of
anelectronic
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an electronic
electronic
man
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,
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they are
also
 regarded as automatic machines for performing various
work
. In my opinion in the future, everything depends on
robots
 it is very bad if everything
remain
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 in the hands of
robots
. We have to achieve everything ourselves and not with the help of a robot I think so.
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