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Today different types of robots are being developed which can serve as companions and workers to help at work and at home. Is this a positive or negative development?

#robots #companions #workers #work #home #development
These days, various campaign
robots
 are being developed that help us in various jobs and
assists
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 us in difficult times. In my opinion,
this
 is a positive opinion. I want to list saving grace. Assistant
robots
 usually look like a person and are able to perform work several times more than ordinary
people
.
Firstly
robots
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 companions provide assistance in the field of medicine.
For
example
, in America, a robot treats more than a thousand
people
 a year. Bots
also
 create artificial organs for
people
.
For instance
, a sick patient from Colorado, his head James Brown, was given an artificial heart
with
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heart disease in 2002.
This
 person currently lives happily without any pain.
Secondly
, at the moment, smart
robots
 that control the house are becoming more popular. Their task is to make life easier for a person. Par
example
, a smart home can control heating systems and
electricity
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 systems. They can
also
 save on communication costs because they control everything.
Thirdly
,
robots
 in the agricultural sector. These
robots
 will
also
 be called
agrobots
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robots
.
For
example
, first of all, they reduce the amount of hard work and save the financial materials of businessmen. These
robots
 are created in Korea at the Chollima plant.
Such
robots
 are
also
 created in Uzbekistan. These bots
this
 year increased the harvest rate by 27% than
last
 year. Fourthly, these
robots
 help the elderly in their
last
 years of life.
For
example
, in China, a guardian robot was created that monitors them and facilitates their work. in
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conclusion
conxlusion
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 I wanted to say that
robots
 have a positive and negative side. I do not know what
people
 think but I think
robots
 have more pros than cons
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