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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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This
 essay concerns various organizations that want their
employees
 to wear smart formal wear,
while
 some of them are only interested in the quality of their
employees
' work. Currently, some organizations have their own uniforms, on the one
hand
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 it is good when the company controls the dress code. In my
opinion
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 it looks professional .
However
, if the dress code is not comfortable for
employees
 and your
employees
 started complaining about it, the best solution would be to change it to be more comfortable ,
for
example
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 workers could wear just
white
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a white
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 T-shirt and black trousers with simple
snickers
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sneakers
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. In conclusion, I will say that
wear
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proper
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 uniform is important in any
companies
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company
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,
although
 the value of quality of work is
also
 important,
nevertheless
; it is pleasant to see
employees
 are well dressed during working hours.
Employees
 will not only
received
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good
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the good
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 impression from other people
,
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 but will gain respect and trust from other people
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