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Tourism has increased so much over the past 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment.However, others claim that it is goos for the economy.

The importance of touristry which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many
people
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 claiming that over the
last
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 five ,decades
tourism
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 has surged rapidly damaging local inhabitants and the environment,
while
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 others believe that it is good for the economy.The substantial influence of
this
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 trend has always sparked controversy over
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 potential impact in recent years.
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 elaborate my perspective regarding both negative and positive impacts and lead to a logical conclusion. On the hand,
tourism
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 is most beneficial for all countries ,
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, if more
people
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visit
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 the country they get to know more about the culture,traditions and customs of the country
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 they can tell their friends and family about the place they
visit
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 which may inspire them to
visit
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 that place,
however
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, it tends to increase more tourist in future.In ,addition
tourism
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 gains more job opportunities for local
people
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.
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, being a tour guide is a great way to earn an income
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 handcraft things or famous food items.
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,there is no doubt that travel
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 gives a negative impact on the country.Sometimes tourists who
visits
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 the local places can
also
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 pollute that place by throwing vapours and bottles which
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 harmful to the environment
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 spoils the look of that area.
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,
tourism
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also
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 rails the traffic jam in
the
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certain metropolis.
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,when one can
visit
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 megacities it is always teeming with
people
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,
,
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however
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 it sometimes makes noise pollution which affects local
people
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. In conclusion ,I believe that
tourism
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 is helpful for developing countries by spreading culture and tradition,
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 some drawbacks can not be ignored like traffic jams and pollution made by tourists.

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