In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achivement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies.Others believe that high levels of personal achivement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. Discuss both sides and gave your own opinion
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To be successful, one should put their constant
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an egalitarian society, but another group argue that success is the byproduct of personal skills and Change preposition
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On one hand, people are claiming that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Equality can provide equal opportunities
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people can show their talent without much effort of getting chances. They do not have to wait for a Add a comma
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On the other hand
, some population opines that personal achivements
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achievements
according to
individual skills and talent. If a person is highly talented in something they can reach the top most. For
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something and if they have the confidence and skill they will achieve it. For all Change preposition
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they need the freedom to do the same.
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egalitarian society opens a great way of Correct article usage
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opportunities
which can be used by everyone. And in my personal view
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