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In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achivement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies.Others believe that high levels of personal achivement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. Discuss both sides and gave your own opinion

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To be successful, one should put their constant
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society should offer an optimistic environment.There are people who
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 that success can be achieved
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 an egalitarian society, but another group argue that success is the byproduct of personal skills and
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hard work
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views and I personally believe that a person can be successful only if
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 are free to succeed or fail
according to
 their individual merits. On one hand, people are claiming that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Equality can provide equal
opportunities
 to individuals which can
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 them
opportunities
 to try out something new or out of their comfort zone.
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 through
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 people can show their talent without much effort of getting chances. They do not have to wait for a
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 for getting
opportunities
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, in
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 there are kids who will be talented in many ways but it is not necessary that they might get the chances equally
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.So if we have an egalitarian system we can assure that all students have got the chances equally.
On the other hand
, some population opines that personal
achivements
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achievements
 are only possible
according to
 individual skills and talent. If a person is highly talented in something they can reach the top most.
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 if an individual is really passionate
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 something and if they have the confidence and skill they will achieve it. For all
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 they need the freedom to do the same.
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 egalitarian society opens a great way of
opportunities
 which can be used by everyone. And in my personal
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 I believe that individual effort and skill are the way to higher
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achievements
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achievements
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