Nowadays, many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. What might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

In recent years, the number of
people
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increased
dramatically.
Thus
, there is a
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debate associated with
employees
who left companies or
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organisations
to
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their
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fact, many companies will
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face major problems in near future,
such
as fewer
employees
. And
also
many small businesses which
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made by
people
have several disadvantages, that I am going discuss in
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many
employees
are not
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their job and feel
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insecurity
,
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that
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decide to
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their
business
.
Moreover
, there are many factors, like as low salaries and poor work environment can
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to
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their position to make their
business
.
Furthermore
,
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of technology has been
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to
people
to
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their
business
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easier than before.
Thus
, many
people
prefer
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be
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own
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instead
of working for others.
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,
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there are some benefits associated
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self employed
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.
Although
the main drawbacks are more substantial.
Firstly
, companies help to
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the economic
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economic
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of countries.
Therefore
,
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of
employees
can
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to
bunkrupty
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bankruptcy
and it can damage to
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country economic
.
Moreover
,
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of financial support for
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can cause several
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and sometimes can
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to
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failure
falter
.
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, many
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face
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business break
and it can
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bring
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for governments. In conclusion, even though
people
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self employed
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but there should be a balance between
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those who
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work
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as a
self
employee
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and who work in a company to avoid
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bankruptcy
and make
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a problem
the problem
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problem
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problems
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for
countriys’economic
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countries economic
.
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