Government should focus thier spending in public service rather than on arts such as music and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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this
contemporary epoch,it was always
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administrative
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should
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their
expand
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in
benevolences
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benevolence
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.A majority of society
favour
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that
government
should have to spend on sculpture
such
as music and painting.
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,I
partially
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with
this
mention
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phenomenan
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phenomenon
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and
i
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will discuss
with
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logical
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conclusion in the upcoming paragraph. There
are
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adequate evidence of
this
view.Which are substantial.The first and foremost one
is occupy
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the
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money
on public facilities gives
individual
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individuals
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so many benefits like masses experience to live in modern flats,
house
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houses
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and
apartment
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as well as
its
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also
provide
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them
modern
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playground parks where pupils can safely play.Adding more to it
squander
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money
on public infrastructure it is good for
hospitality
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sectors
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.
While
development
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of hospitals
are
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very helpful for individuals so,they can take more
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benefits
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and
aslo
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also
public hospitals provide
a
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excellent number of treatment
in
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less
money
respectively.
consequently
with the
development
of
nation
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people
also
get
a
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alot
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a lot
lot
of new jobs and high paid income. Probing ahead spending
money
on arts
such
as music and painting is
also
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investment for
nation
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.
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its
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attract
the
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tourist attraction.
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for example
if
alot
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a lot
of tourists visit to see the art of the
country
then
government
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the government
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can earn so much
foreigner
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foreign
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currency and that
money
they can invest in
development
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the development
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of the
country
.
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that the
country
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economy is grown up
as well as
the GDP of
nation
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the nation
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is
also
increase
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rapidly.
To conclude
,
according to
me
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the main
things
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is
development
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the development
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of
nation
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even
government
spend on public facilities or even its
spend
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on sculptures both
sided
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nation
get the
benifits
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benefits
.
However
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best way to modify the
country
is better if they spend on public facilities so it can be faster
development
.
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