Government should focus thier spending in public service rather than on arts such as music and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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debatable whether topic administration should distinguish their expansion in benevolence.A majority of society favours that law should have to spend on sculpture

such

as music and painting.

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will discuss it with the logical conclusion in the upcoming paragraph. There is adequate evidence of

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view.Which are substantial.The first and foremost one is occupying capital on public facilities gives individuals so many benefits like masses experience to live in modern flats, houses and apartments

as well as

also

providing them with modern playground parks where pupils can safely play.Adding more to

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squandering

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on public infrastructure

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is good for the hospitality sector.

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the development of hospitals is very helpful for individuals so,they can take more benefits from hospitals or the government and

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public hospitals provide an excellent number of

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for less

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respectively.

consequently

with the improvement of the

nation

people

also

get a lot of new jobs and high paid income. Probing ahead spending cash on arts

such

as music and painting is

also

a good investment for the

nation

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attract

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tourist attraction.

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if a lot of tourists visit to see the art of the agrarian

then

the government can earn so much foreign currency and

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payment they can invest in the development of the agrarian.

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that the country's economy is grown up

as well as

the GDP of the

nation

is

also

increasing rapidly.

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the main thing is the development of the

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spend on public facilities or even its spending on sculptures both sides community get the benefits.,

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best way to modify the homey is better if they spend on public facilities so it can be faster advancement.