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The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate two scenarios preventing
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flood
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floods
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 that can cause
damages
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damage
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 to
building
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build
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 in
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area
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the area
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. Apparently,
raining
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rain
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 plays a vital role in causing
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a flood
the flood
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flood
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floods
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, the
rain
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rainwater
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water
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 runoffs the land and slides into
lower
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a lower
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 ground
area
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 which is located near the river.
Therefore
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, the liquid will be
stucked
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stuck
 in
building
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the building
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area
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 which is the lowest part of
land
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the land
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. The stopbank was made to stop the
water
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 flowing back
in
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into
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 the lowest
area
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 where houses and buildings had been located.
In addition
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,
floodgate
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a floodgate
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 had been placed on
ground
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the ground
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 level near the river,
this
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 helps
water
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flowing
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 through the pipe and is released to a large
water
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 source.
However
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, there are some places that
has
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 no stopbank,
instead
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 of placing
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water
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a water
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 stopper,
building
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the building
a building
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 should be raised up to prevent the
damages
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damage
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 from
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flood
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the flood
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. The buildings were raised higher than the 100 years
flood
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 level. These two options can help many houses safely from natural flooding.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flood, area, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elevated
  • flood-prone areas
  • protective measures
  • water levels
  • structure
  • contents
  • stilts
  • pillars
  • drainage system
  • divert water
  • managing water flow
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