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Water is a valuable finite resource. Therefore, many suggest that it is best for the governments all over the world to control how much water their citizens use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this suggestion?

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Water
 is an essential need for human existence in the world and
governments
 are being pressured to regulate its consumption.It is so essential that it affects the economic stability and growth of many
governments
.
Initially
,traditional methods of storing
water
 made it impossible for human beings to conserve
water
 but with the modern methods now taking shape,it is now easier to conserve
water
 even in arid and semi-arid geographical regions of the world.
Governments
 have come up with essential infrastructures like the building of reserves and dams that have enabled effective
water
 storage.It is now easier for
water
 consumers all over the world to consume
water
 without shortages compared to the old days. Primarily,
governments
 should focus on reliable
water
 treatment methods that restrict consumers from contracting hazardous diseases rather than engaging in the business of regulating
water
 consumption and usage.More strict
water
-restricting acts should be enforced and anyone found guilty of contaminating
water
 to be held accountable in the courts of law.
This
 will make it a valuable finite resource. In conclusion,
governments
 should engage their citizens in public awareness about
water
-related benefits rather than restricting the resource that humanity can never manage to live with.Once the public is aware of effective ways of storing and preserving
water
,
then
 restriction plays no role since the resource will be used without wastage.The introduction of meter gauges to help monitor
water
 usage should
also
 help citizens limit
themselves
Correct pronoun usage
their
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overconsumption.
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