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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
the pie charts compare the proportion of
water
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usage
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 for certain purposes in 6 different areas around the world.
overall
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,
while
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 North
America
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 and Europe utilize a huge amount of
water
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 in industries, other areas are recorded to use
water
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 mostly in agriculture. remarkably, the figure for
water
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usage
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 in domestic
duties
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 is low in all surveyed regions.
to begin
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 with,
water
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usage
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 for agricultural purposes heads the list in central
Asia
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 and Africa, accounting for 88% and 84%, respectively, followed by the category of Southeast
Asia
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. the figure for
water
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 used in domestic
duties
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 is similar in both central
Asia
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 and south-east
Asia
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, taking up 7%,
whereas
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 9% of
water
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 is used in
this
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.
furthermore
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, the amount of
water
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 spent on industrial purposes in Africa is 7%, in comparison with that in central
Asia
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 (5%) and Southeast
Asia
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 (12%).
in addition
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, the
water
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usage
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 for domestic
duties
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 in both American areas is quite similar, around 13-19%,
while
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 the consumption of
water
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 in South
America
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 is nearly 2 times higher than that in North
America
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. the figure for
water
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usage
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 in Europe and North
America
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's industries reached 53% and 48%, in turn. only a meagre percentage of
water
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 was spent on agriculture and domestic
duties
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 in Europe (32% and 15%)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, america, duties, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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