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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Whilst caring for
children
 is one of the, if not the most important
job
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 in any society, I think it is not reasonable to make sure every expectant parent should be required to take a course that would prepare them to be good
parents
. My opposition to
this
 is that people should only do the course if they wish to, it should not be prescribed. Another reason is that many prospective
parents
 may already have experience
of
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looking after
children
 because they have looked after siblings or their work involves looking after
children
,
such
 as kindergarten teachers. There is
also
 the issue that not everything can be taught in a class and most
parents
 have to learn a lot when they have
children
. It is part of both
theirs
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 and their
children
’s development. Another factor is what kind of car
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is
 required for
children
 because many people differ
on
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 their views of what care entails. Some people believe in a very
hands off
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 approach allowing
children
 to be more independent,
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whereas
 others believe
children
shoul
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should
,d be directed and instructed at
eveyr
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every
 stage of their lives.
Therefore
, the type of class may not be suitable for some prospective
parents
.
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