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Some people think that government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that government should encourage
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science
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 more than other subjects to increase
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 development. It might be true that when their citizens have
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science
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 knowledge. It will develop their nation either way. I agree with the view of
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science
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 is simple learning of any innovation and
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. If the country has
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 innovation, it will help them to increase
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 economic growth in the same way.
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, Japan
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80 years ago had
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 economic crisis when they lose in the second world war. Their government had many strategies to rise
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potentials
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 by
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 in education especially in
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 with
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 from the United States of America. The result
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 they can
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 many modern
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 companies
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 industry and
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can develop infrastructure
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 the same time
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technology
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 research.
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,
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 subject can help people to develop
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logical thinking because
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 will
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teach
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 by logical sequence and think like a system. The logical thinking earned from
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 can adapt to any
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knowledge
 in the modern world. For
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, coding is
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 back side of any technologies
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currently
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.
Developer
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 must
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 coding logical ordering before
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develop
 their application or some programs with
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as
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a
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science
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 logic.
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both reasons that can support the
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 mention
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the importance of
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 more than other subjects because
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 is
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 basis of any innovation and
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 in now a day. Government must support
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 task more than others when they want to increase
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their
citizens
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 performance in the same way.
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