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Smart phones and other similar electronic gadgets have reduced the contact between friends. Discuss how far you agree with this statement.

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 and other electronic devices decreased physical
contact
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 among friends. I totally agree with
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 statement because many young adults spent several
hours
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 using a phone and they have no physical
contac
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contact
 anymore to talk to each other. One reason is that
people
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 spend many
hours
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 using their
cellphones
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 because they want to see what other individuals upload each day on
facebook
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.
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, many
people
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 are glued to their screens because they are interested in watching what other
people
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 upload or said.
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, many of these
people
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 love to play
video-games
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 for so many
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., and
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this
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 avoid them
having
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contact
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research made by the University of Los Angeles, explains that most of these teens spent more than 9
hours
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 using a
cellphone
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cell phone
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 during
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 day, and
this
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 avoid
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them
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 get in touch with other
people
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. Another reason is that many of these individuals do not get in physical
contact
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 anymore because they rather have video callings to get
along with
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 others.
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, they love to text
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each other
instead
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 of speaking
with
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because they find no
intersting
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interest in
 getting along.
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, many of them have invented a new written way to communicate
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 other. To explain
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, all over the world, many teenagers are so bored to write complete sentences that they use
abreviations
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abbreviations
 that are difficult to
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understand
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, so many parents have lost communication with their children. In conclusion, I totally agree that
smart phones
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smartphones
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 reduced
contact
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 among individuals because they are so fascinating to spend several
hours
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 using their
electronical
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electronic
 devices and they found not interested in
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speaking
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 in person to each other. If
this
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 situation
continuos
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continues
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 like
this
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, society might get rid
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 physical
contact
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among
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 each other.

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