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the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.
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the chart illustrates what people
prefere
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prefer
a
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coffee
 or
a
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tea when they go to buy or drink it from shops or
cafe
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cafes
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 in five
australin
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Australian
 cities.
overall
, most of them went to
cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffe
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coffee
 or tea in
last
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the last
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 4
week
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weeks
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where
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which
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it
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reaches just below 65
percent
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per cent
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.
on the other hand
,
individulas
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individuals
 who went to bay fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
week
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weeks
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 are
the
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 lowest
where
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which
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is slightly under 45
percent
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per cent
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in
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at
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 its
highst
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highest
 point.
to begin
, in the most
hapitual
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habitual
,
resident
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residents
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 of
hobart
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Hobart
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,
melbourne
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Melbourne
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 and
sydney
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Sydney
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 have the
highst
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highest
 selling in cafes for drinks where it ranges
aproximatly
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approximately
 between 60 and 65
percent
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per cent
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 of its citizen prefer cafes.
however
,
brisbane
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Brisbane
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 and
adeliaida
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Adelaide
 have the lowest
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capital
prefernig
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preferring
 where
slight
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slightly
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 above 55 to just under 50
percent
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per cent
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 of its people prefer going to
cafe
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a cafe
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 .espesially, in
adelaide
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Adelaide
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 where there is
slight
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a slight
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 prefer to
bought
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buy
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 instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
moreover
,people
prefer
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who prefer
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 to buy fresh
coffee
come
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comes
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to
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second to going to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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.
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especially
espesially
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especially
, in major cities ,
whereas
 buying fresh
coffee
 comes
last
 in
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almost
alomst
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almost
 all of them
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cafe, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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