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The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
shows
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show
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 the structure of Garldson
town
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 and
two
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 planned locations for building a supermarket. The
town
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 is located between three other cities, on
northern
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the northern
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 part is Hindon,
western
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the western
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 part is near Brandson and on the eastern border there is Cansdon city.
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Town
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The town
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center
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centre
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 is surrounded by industrial areas and there is a railway passing through these parts. houses are mainly built in the north and south of the
center
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centre
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 and in the industrial zone. There are
also
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two
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 main roads, one connecting Crandson to Brandson and the other
directly
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direction
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goes
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going
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 from Garldson to Hindon. There are
two
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 places marked for the future supermarket.
First
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The first
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 one, named
as
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apply
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S1, is in the countryside between Hindon and Garlson.
This
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 location is seemingly close to industries and far from
housings
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housing
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. It is
also
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 between the
two
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 main transportation facilities, the main road and the railway.
This
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 will be used mostly by people passing through these towns.
In contrast
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, the other suggested site is in the middle of the
town
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center
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centre
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 which is shown as S2 on the map. It is a more convenient place to build a market because it is closer to both living areas and industrial parts. Another positive point about
this
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 location is its nearness to the railway.
Overall
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, the S2 location seems to be a better spot for building a supermarket
while
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 the S1 position will have less usage for the community.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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