The intrnet has brought sea change in the way inforamtion is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. what are the most serious problems linked to the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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The
Internet
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brings countless benefits to humanity, nowadays
information
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spreads through the
internet
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unlimitedly, and even though, the
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role of the
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in our life, there are some serious drawbacks, I will mention some in my essay and I will suggest solutions as well. First of all, is privacy, as a person commences exploring websites, these websites automatically ask for certain data
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as IP address, location, name and even credit card details, which are called cookies,
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, the personal
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is liable to be stolen.
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, some companies are involved in selling
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'
information
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to other companies to use
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in announcements. a clear example is the Facebook scandal that took place a few years ago, as Facebook sells
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' data for immense profits.
as a result
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public should be careful on the
internet
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when it comes to their private
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. Another issue that makes
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users
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worry, is
hackers
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,
hackers
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are as known,
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people
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's money and they use
users
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' identification to make profits in an illegal way,
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, a friend of mine, lost 700$ in
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internet
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an internet
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purchase
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that he never made. So I think
people
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should concentrate when it is come to spending money on the
Internet
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. Here are some solutions to make the
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more proper and secure, first of all, the authorities should impose laws against any improper use of
users
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'
information
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.
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, authorities should begin awareness campaigns to make
people
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recognize the
hackers
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and their ways
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and to know the safe sites and unsafe sites as well.
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,
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trustful
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sources to the audience, so
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will take news from approved sources.
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, the
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is state of art in modern life, in spite of the privacy,
hackers
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and other issues that face
Internet
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users
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, I believe
such
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obstacles can be tackled easily.
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