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The intrnet has brought sea change in the way inforamtion is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. what are the most serious problems linked to the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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The
Internet
 brings countless benefits to humanity, nowadays
information
 spreads through the
internet
 unlimitedly, and even though, the
vital
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 role of the
Internet
 in our life, there are some serious drawbacks, I will mention some in my essay and I will suggest solutions as well. First of all, is privacy, as a person commences exploring websites, these websites automatically ask for certain data
such
 as IP address, location, name and even credit card details, which are called cookies,
hence
, the personal
information
 is liable to be stolen.
In addition
, some companies are involved in selling
users
'
information
 to other companies to use
them
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in announcements. a clear example is the Facebook scandal that took place a few years ago, as Facebook sells
users
' data for immense profits.
as a result
 public should be careful on the
internet
 when it comes to their private
information
. Another issue that makes
Internet
users
 worry, is
hackers
,
hackers
 are as known,
steal
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people
's money and they use
users
' identification to make profits in an illegal way,
for instance
, a friend of mine, lost 700$ in
internet
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an internet
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purchase
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 that he never made. So I think
people
 should concentrate when it is come to spending money on the
Internet
. Here are some solutions to make the
Internet
 more proper and secure, first of all, the authorities should impose laws against any improper use of
users
'
information
.
Secondly
, authorities should begin awareness campaigns to make
people
 recognize the
hackers
 and their ways
,
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 and to know the safe sites and unsafe sites as well.
Furthermore
,
introducing
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trustful
information
 sources to the audience, so
people
 will take news from approved sources.
Finally
, the
Internet
 is state of art in modern life, in spite of the privacy,
hackers
 and other issues that face
Internet
users
, I believe
such
 obstacles can be tackled easily.
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