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The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.

The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.
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The line graph gives information
the
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 changes in per capita
consumption
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 of
beef
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, pork, broiler and turkey in the United States between 1955 and 2012.
It is clear that
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 the
consumption
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 of
beef
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 was by far the most popular of the four
kind
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 of meat from 1995 until 2009.
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, there was
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considerable
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increased
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 in broilers consumptions over the period given and
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 as the most consumed meat in the USA. Between 1995 and 1976,
beef
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consuption
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consumption
 rose significantly from 60 lbs to a peak of 90 lbs per
person
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 per year.
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, during the period,
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broiler
consumption
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 rose to nearly 30 lbs per
person
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,
while
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 the
figured
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 for pork fluctuated between 50 and 40
pounds
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 per
person
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. Turkey was by far the least popular meat, with figured below 10
pounds
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 per capita each year By 2012, the
beef
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consuption
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consumption
 of Americans drop by around 50
pounds
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 per
person
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.
By contrast
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,
the
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broiler
consumption
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 rose significantly and reach its peak
around
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of around
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 2
pounds
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 more than
the
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beef
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consumption
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. There
was
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 no significant changes in the trends for pork ( approximately 50
pounds
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 ) and turkey (around 10
pound
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pounds
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)
consumption
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 for the whole year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beef, person, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figured" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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