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Some students tend to play computer games rather than do spot. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?

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Today's
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 technologically advanced world, more children prefer to play indoor exercise with electronic gadgets rather than outdoor
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 in the field. There are many factors that account for
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 trend, and various measures can be implemented to tackle
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 problem. In many countries
childrens
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are
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spending their leisure time in front of a computer
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increasingly
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 and there is a number of reasons to explain why
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 is happening. first and foremost, lucrative advanced different varieties of computer
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 are easily available in the market which is convenient to participate
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 Online
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 have the power to make users addicted to that
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 and most people cannot escape from them.
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, blue whale
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 were very dangerous to the students who play since they cannot stop once they play the
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.
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,society changed a lot , children growing up
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 nuclear families have no option to go outside.
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 problem leads the young generation to indulge in computer
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 as their pastime. It is possible,
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, to take steps to encourage our teenagers to participate in sports
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movements
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. Governments should invest in building a number of parks and playgrounds for the younger generation to Facilitate sports activities. Another measure could be to decrease the screen time by parents in their homes
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 of actively engaging with their children with fun
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.
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, teachers encourage and motivate their students to participate in various sports
exercise
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 by rewarding them for performance rather than academics only.
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 may lead to motivating young students to play outdoor
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exercise
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 are some obvious reasons to explain, the rise in the popularity of online
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, some simple measures should be adopted by Governments, teachers and parents to meet these challenges.
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