In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

Nowadays, in some states,
the
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older
people
do not receive the quantity of respect they deserve. Is common to see that young
people
tend to ignore the fact that elderly
people
have the most
necessity
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and need the most
attentions
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attention
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. To my mind, a cause of
this
decrease
of
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respect is the recent progress of
the
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technology which put the young population to look only at the screen of their smartphones and to hear only the music in their headphones.
As a result
, any subject will probably
appears
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selfish and careless.
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, it is not rare
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on a bass or
in
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a train and see that seats are all taken by
youngest
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the youngest
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looking at their electronic devices because of which they do not notice the presence of older
people
stend
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stand
up in front of them. Obviously, the seat should be taken by the oldest...
This
few interest in other harms to the whole society. In fact, seniors should be protected by everyone and invited
them
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to take part
of
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all social activities. Just because they spend a lot of years
in
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this
Earth they could teach us life lessons and give historical information that you cannot find in books. If we think about the second and
the
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second world war and the Shoah, our grandparents probably live that period in person. It could be great to give them the possibility to tell
all
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the story and how was the
live
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during a
human's
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disaster. Listening to
this
history could teach to the
theenagers
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teenagers
how much
lucky
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they are and
to
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be
greateful
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grateful
every day to be
freedom
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social structures
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • intergenerational respect
  • dual-income households
  • technological advancements
  • perception
  • value shifts
  • vigor
  • innovation
  • increased mobility
  • neglected
  • mental health
  • generational divide
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • social fabric
  • healthcare strain
  • inadequate care
  • quality of life
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