The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.
The bar chart compares the proportion of males and females of various
age
categories in Australia, that engaged in regular exercises in 2010.
Overall
, for all the
age
groups, except those between 15 and 24
years
,
women
were physically more active than men.
Also
, the proportion of males who undertook regular workouts increased as they become older. In 2010, it was observed that for those aged between 15 and 24
years
, 52.8% of males and 47.7% of
women
respectively, did regular physical exercises.
Thereafter
, for Australians between 25 and 35
years
, the percentage of men that participated in frequent
acivities
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activities
dropped to 42.2%,
while
that of the females rose to 48.9%.
Subsequently
, the percentage of
women
partaking in regular
workout
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rose steadily among the different
age
categories, reaching a peak of 53.3%, in
women
between 45 and 54
years
.
This
is followed by a slight drop of 0.3% in those that were 55 to 65
years
.
Women
aged 65
years
and above were the least active with only 47.7% of them participating in drills.
Also
, physical activities amongst the male
age
categories rose steadily from 39.5% of men between 35 and 44
years
exercising regularly, to 46.7% of those 65
years
and over, engaging in frequent
work out
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