Many people are afraid to leave their houses because of the fear of crime. Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crimes. Others feel that little can be done. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, crime is one of the factors which affects deciding to buy a home. People who live in high-crime areas tend to have mental problems because it makes them feel unsafe and nervous. Some people decide to leave their homes and move to safe areas.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

66 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

The graphic indicates the gender ratio of teachers in six kinds of UK education in 2010.

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Us film industry has a huge influence on people of the world. It is better that government should invest in local films industry to what extent to you agree or disagree

in many countries around the world, rural people are moving to citites, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.