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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing olive oil, which consists of seven stages, and requires a manual workforce and special equipment.
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 with, olives are picked up from the trees manually by workers, who
then
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 store them into baskets and carry fruits to a special machine,where they are rinsed with cold water.
Following
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this
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, a belt of olives is transferred into a smashing machine, where an olive paste and olive stones are produced. After that, the olive paste is packed into bags with holes, for
further
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 pressing,
whereas
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 stones do not require any
further
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 processing . Created emulsion
then
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 is separated in a centrifuge with two products as an outcome: water( as a waste product) and the oil itself. The final diagram describes storage in warehouses and the sale of the commodity in supermarkets.
Overall
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, the process of producing olive oil is a multistage one, which involves human resources and complex machinery.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting - the process of collecting ripe fruits, such as olives, from trees.
  • Rinsing - washing thoroughly with water to clean away debris or impurities.
  • Crushing - smashing or grinding something into small pieces or a paste.
  • Paste - a thick, soft mixture formed by crushing olives.
  • Pressing - the act of applying force to extract liquid.
  • Centrifuge - a machine that separates substances of different densities by spinning them rapidly.
  • Filtering - the process of removing impurities or unwanted particles from a liquid.
  • Bottling - packaging liquid in bottles for storage or sale.
  • Impurities - unwanted or foreign substances within a mixture.
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