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The number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics.

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The bar graph illustrates various
medals
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 (Gold, Silver, Bronze) in the top five nations(Norway, the USA, Germany, Russia, and Canada) in the
summer
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 and
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 competitions.
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, the
summer
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games
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 won the highest amount of badges than the
winter
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games
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. In terms of the
Winter
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 contests, Norway grabbed the highest amount of
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 compared to Russia and Canada,
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 in the
summer
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 Olympics, the United States won the highest number of
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 as opposed to Britain and France. In terms of the United States, the
summer
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games
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 obtain the highest ranking badges, about 2000 on
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 as opposed to the
winter
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 contests only 290 appropriately.
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,
winter
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 athletic
medals
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 were higher in Russia than
the
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summer
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games
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(approximately 1800 and roughly 190 correspondingly). In the
winter
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 contest, the Norway champions shoot a peak at above 350
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 and were nearly half of Canada(200 awards).
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, it is conspicuous that Germany's winners acquired almost identically in both competitions. The other countries were not so well-known in the
summer
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 Olympics throughout the year, which was responsible for under one-third proportions.
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