Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there are
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lot
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to learn modern subjects
such
as
technology
and science.
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is because
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I think our
life
can
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on these subjects. In my point of view,
history
is not important as these subjects.
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main reason that
students
should study some
history
in school is that it provides crucial insights into
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around the world. We can learn
about
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about the past and revolutions.
For instance
, why the war
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started, how it ended, how many people
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in the war and so all. It can
also
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us to become
more
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a more
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rounded person. We can learn
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mistakes made before and
then
we start not to make mistakes like that. What is more, studying
history
can assist broaden the horizon. If we look
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our
life
we can see technologies developed very well. Studying
technology
gives tremendous opportunity
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get
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a
well paid
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job.
However
, studying
technology
, science or art leads to
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future career. Even learning how to draw and use
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in art class is more useful for
students
because of the high demand for graphic designers on websites and advertisements. Without
technology
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we can not imagine our
life
. We can make our
life
easier with
technologies
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. Very few
students
will end up with careers in
history
but a large percentage will work in the arts and especially the sciences.
It is clear that
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a moderate approach is best. School administrations should not remote
history
from
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but in my
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they should devote more time to
the
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teaching
technology
and
the
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science.
Then
students
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life
can be marvellous.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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