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the diagram below shows the process by which paper is manufactured and recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

the diagram below shows the process by which paper is manufactured and recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The picture reveals the stage of manufacturing and recycling
paper
.
Overall
, the main source of
a
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apply
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paper
 manufactured
are
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is
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 trees, next
its
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it's
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 turned into
pulp
 (material made from crushed wood) and will enter the recycling
process
. It is noticeable that trees are cut with
saw
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a saw
the saw
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 in
lumber
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a lumber
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 mill into
logs
. The
logs
then
 go to
pulping
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the pulping
a pulping
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 centre and the
process
 of turning the
logs
 into
pulp
begin
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begins
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. After that,
paper-making
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the paper-making
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 plant
process
,
which
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in which
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paper
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the paper
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 press starts and the papers are created. All of the papers that
already
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are already
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 used are transported by the recycling car, and get shredded and
turn
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turned
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 back into a
pulp
 . The
pulp
then
 starts the
paper
 press
process
 and repeated the same stage again.
To sum up
, the stage that
keep
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keeps
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 repeating in a cycle are recycling stages,
meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 the manufacturing
process
 will keep producing
pulp
 from trees. There are 2 ways of making
pulp
,
first
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the first
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 is from
the
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apply
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logs
,
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and another
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another
Correct determiner usage
the
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one
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other
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 is from
the
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apply
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shredded
paper
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, pulp, process, logs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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