The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organizations.

The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organizations.
The bar chart illustrates how five organizations invested money into four different aspects(1) of the company, including machinery(2), building, staff training, and research.
Overall
, organization
B
invested the most money in all aspects of its business,
while
organisation
D invested the least.
Organisation
B
spent the biggest proportion of their
investment
on construction, at approximately €1.7
billion
,
while
organisations
A,
C
, D, and
E
only invested around €0.5 million each. The second biggest
investment
of
organisation
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Organisation
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B
was in research, at approximately €1.6
billion
, which was double the
investment
of
organisation
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Organisation
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A in the same aspect.
Organisation
C
invested approximately €0.7
billion
in research,
while
organisations
D and
E
both invested around €0.3
billion
. Staff training was the third biggest
investment
of
organisation
B
, at €1.5
billion
,
however
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it was the biggest
investment
of
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Organisation
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organisation
A at €1
billion
. Meanwhile,
organisations
C
, D, and
E
all invested approximately €0.4
billion
. Machinery was the smallest
investment
of
organisation
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Organisation
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B
, at €1.3
billion
, but the biggest
investment
of
organisation
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Organisation
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C
, at €0.7
billion
.
Organisation
A invested €0.8
billion
in machinery,
while
organisations
D and
E
only invested half of that amount
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