The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organizations.
The bar chart illustrates how five organizations invested money into four different aspects(1) of the company, including machinery(2), building, staff training, and research.
Overall
, organization B
invested the most money in all aspects of its business, while
organisation
D invested the least.
Organisation
B
spent the biggest proportion of their investment
on construction, at approximately €1.7 billion
, while
organisations
A, C
, D, and E
only invested around €0.5 million each. the second biggest investment
of organisation
B
was in research, at approximately €1.6 billion
, which was double the investment
of organisation
A in the same aspect. Organisation
C
invested approximately €0.7 billion
in research, while
organisations
D and E
both invested around €0.3 billion
. Staff training was the third biggest investment
of organisation
B
, at €1.5 billion
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it was the biggest Add a comma
,however
investment
of organisation
A at €1 billion
. Meanwhile, organisations
C
, D, and E
all invested approximately €0.4 billion
. Machinery was the smallest investment
of organisation
B
, at €1.3 billion
, but the biggest investment
of organisation
C
, at €0.7 billion
. Organisation
A invested €0.8 billion
in machinery, while
organisations
D and E
only invested half of that amountSubmitted by tjumagul67 on
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