It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays more and more children start to become difficult to raise. Every
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has to learn the simple rules that will help him to live in the world, but children
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rules , but punishment method can not be used to teach them not to do it;
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he studies both social life and
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. The first decision that the teacher will decide is to punish the
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to understand , why the
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did any action and tell him without physical and
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love the teacher and influence on
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that small punishments are acceptable , and sometimes are more effective than a previous method .
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small person had
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in school parents can take his favourite
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away for a week. After
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he might understand that
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violence
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violence
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boring week for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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