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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
Nowadays, there are a lot of advertisements that surround us. Some
society
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 think that businesses always show their
products
 to people from
new
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side
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. From my point of view, it doesn`t have any
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disadvantages.
Conversely
, it provides
a new abilities
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a new ability
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of
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certain
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product
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products
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. It is actually
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 positive development.
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one
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 hand,
due to
 the
advertisings
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, which emphasise that their
products
 are always new, competition between companies
are
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 going to rise. It comes to the quality increasing. Thanks to
this
, we will use
the
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products
with
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 good quality. Since the
products
 with low quality won`t be sold. Only the competitive companies with better goods will
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.
In
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other hand
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, as
i
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 have already mentioned, the
advertisings
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 like that show
to
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people
a new abilities
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new abilities
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of
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in
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 certain
products
.
Due to
this
, you can recognise a new method or new opportunity of using it. If any of the upgrades will be done, how
we
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 going to know about it?
That is
 one of the reasons why advertising
exisits
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exists
.
Finally
, the
advertisings
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, which emphasise that their
products
 are always new, help
to
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the
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old people correctly use
it
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them
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. Unfortunately, not
an
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every old person has a child that shows them how to use it. So,
a
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modern
marketologists
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bracketologists
 make
a
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simple advertising that
understandable
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is understandable
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 even for a child.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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