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some people thinks that all university should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is argued that universities must require students to only study majors which will be useful in the future, like those related to science and
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 others believe
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 should go into whatever major they like.
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 essay will discuss both views and finish in favour of the latter. On the hand, a particular population state that universities should obligate students to go into majors that will be functional and useful in the future, like
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 and sciences
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. They make the case that in the near future, the business world will become much more competitive and the bedrock of that competition, is based on
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 mainly. That’s why
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 group state that the country must plan a long-term investment and dedicate huge funding to it.
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, the USA and China, which are the two major monsters of
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 industry, have already begun operating their plans for the upcoming competition.
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, the general
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 believe in free will. They say that the country needs more than just one source of income.
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, universities should be open to all kinds of students and their interests.
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, it is known that some men and women have a keen sense in some particular fields and making them abandon their passion and obligatory entering them into other fields, will be a waste of their talents. Personally speaking, my opinion is
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 should be allowed to study whatever they want, work in any part of the nation’s industry they wish and decide their own destiny. That’s why pushing
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 to enter a path they don’t like is logically and morally wrong. In conclusion, even though it's completely true that in the next century,
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 and science-related programs will become far more significant, the idea that
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 should only study these specific majors is absurd. In my point of view, freedom in choosing what to pursue is much more valid.
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