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In some countries, the government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive? or negative?

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An increasing number of vehicles have been deteriorating air quality and causing other problems. To solve the problems, governments imposed a congestion
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 during peak demand.
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 is both a negative and a positive trend. On the one hand, compared to other alternatives
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 as promoting public transport, imposing a congestion
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 does not require much financial support, which means that the
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 only needs to set an electronic toll. If implemented, the
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 will have more funding that can be allocated to other public sectors,
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 as education and health systems.
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,
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 has its drawbacks. For those who are forced to travel during peak hours for work,
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 will increase their financial burden, which is unfair to them. In
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 cases, people affected by
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policy
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 may develop resentment towards legislation or protest against the
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, causing people to be reluctant to cooperate with the authorities, which may lead to social unrest.
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, some truck drivers in London may have to pay the
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 carrying groceries for a store or factory in the downtown area. Paying the
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 may lead them to take strike action one day. In conclusion, based on the above analysis and evidence, imposing a congestion
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 can be an effective way to solve the traffic problem and contribute to saving state revenue.
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, the
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 can
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 have a negative impact on certain groups.
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, the
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 should use
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 method more wisely.
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task response
Ensure you address all parts of the question fully, including presenting a clear opinion on whether the development is positive or negative.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a consistent and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay, using cohesive devices to connect sentences and paragraphs.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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