The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.
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The bar graph
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the outcomes of a survey which shows the percentage of residents'
routin
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routine
in buying and drinking
of
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apply
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coffee
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and tea in five different cities in
Australian
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Australia
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.
Overall
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, BothSydney,Melbourne, and Hobart presented the highest
porportion
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proportion
of going to a cafe for
a
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apply
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coffee
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or tea in
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last
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the last
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4weeks
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4 weeks
.
In contrast
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,Brisbane and
Adeliade
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Adelaide
showed the lowest percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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at the same time. Over 60%
percent
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per cent
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of residents in Sydney, Melbourne, and H9bart went to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea as it is
showen
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shown
61
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in 61
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%, 63% ,and 62% respectively. At the same time ,Hobart recorded the highest percentage
near
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nearly
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55% of the residents who
buoght
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bought
brought
instant
coffee
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in the
last
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4 weeks, followed by Brisbane people at just 53%percent. Buying fresh
coffee
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shows the lowest
percent
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per cent
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in all cities, where
Sydny
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Sydney
present the highest
porpotion
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proportion
portion
below 45%percen,
while
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Brisbane and
Adeliade
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Adelaide
shows
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show
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the lowest
percent
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per cent
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at the same rate of 30.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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