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Some people think that cities (civic areas) are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in rural areas. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The populations of
cityside
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 are extremely wider than rural areas. Some people choose to reside
at
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in
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urban
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the urban
an urban
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place
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places
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.
whereas
, others prefer to stay in the village side. I strongly believe that
the
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urban localities have added advantages
than
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over
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 others.
This
 essay will discuss both views and highlight opinions. On the one hand,
Metropolitician
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Metropolitan
 cities are stronger in transportation, resources, entertainment, education and laws.
Moreover
, 50% of the population are native residents and
rest
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the rest
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 of the folks are migrated from different locations.
For instance
, cities provide
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of opportunities towards employment, yet many citizens are jobless. Hospitality facilities are notable in
this
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these
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 areas.
On the other hand
, There are few communities
hate
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who hate
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 to leave their native residence.
Furthermore
, the bonding between each
others
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other
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are
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is
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 unbreakable. Agricultural lands can be seen broadly in those spots
as well as
 the greeneries. Despite
this
, a very less number of citizens avoid leaving out. It is widely accepted that
,
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 Deforestation is
a
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the
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 main cause
for
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of
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the
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global warming. I would argue that
,
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 There are plenty of tourist points which attract more humans to visit. Facilities are twofold So,
the
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so the
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 urban residence had been placed
at
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first in a preference list. In conclusion, city dwellers are comparatively higher and more beneficial than rural residents.
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