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Some people believe women are better leaders than men. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In contemporary society, there is increasing speculation, that
women
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 possess the good characteristics of becoming great superiors. Other folks believe that
women
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 are better
leaders
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 than
men
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, I partially agree with
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 viewpoint, and
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 essay will discuss my own perspective objectively before drawing my conclusion. Obviously, there are a plethora of reasons supporting
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 to be good
leaders
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 rather than
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. Amongst them,
women
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 collaborate, they have a genuine passion for working with others and make sure that each of the members is involved in the process, that a good
leader
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 should listen to the team to voice their opinion and be a part of any conversation.
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,
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 are accessible in a way that, they have innate compassion to support individuals no matter their ranks or positions, with their open hearts and mind to provide understanding to others because of their motherly instinct, which can display to be a good
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.
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, we cannot deny the fact, that
men
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 are born to be a
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 because they have already proven themselves, with their powerful and fearless personalities
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 having the courage to take risks which turns out to be
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quick success.
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 are the
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 of most leading companies and businesses in the world,
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 the majority of the members are
men
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 too.
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 they have short in some aspects as
women
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, gender cannot be defined in being a good
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. In conclusion, one should exhibit all good requirements of a good
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 and prove that they are worth it to an extraordinary position whatever their sexes,
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 I partially agree with the point of view, either
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 or
men
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 can be great
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leaders
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional intelligence
  • democratic leadership
  • participation
  • collaboration
  • diverse leadership
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • perspectives
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
  • supportive work environment
  • historical data
  • research
  • female-led businesses
  • financial performance
  • multitasking
  • managing complex projects
  • teams
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