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Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #climate #change #impact #business #opportunities
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It is inevitable that the world suffered from many disasters caused by
the
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global warming nowadays. Some believe that it
detriment
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 several industries
due to
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disturbance
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the disturbance
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 that it produces.
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, others argue that
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this phenomena
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this phenomenon
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 could give a potential chance to create a new product for society. On the one hand, people think that the rapid change of
climate
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 has affected many
companies
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companies'
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 productivity. It is because the
climate
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 stimulates some disasters
happen
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upredictably
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unpredictably
predictably
 without any prevention toward it.
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,
in
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Jakarta, which is a part of Indonesia
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located
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 in
low
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a low
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 land area, often
geting
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getting
 a disaster in rainy seasons
particularly
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flood
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floods
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. It totally
disturb
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 the road and
transportion
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transportation
transport
 system which make their employee get many difficulties
to
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work
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.
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, the company should release a wise policy which
prioritizing
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 their
employees
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employee's
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 safety and at the same time
they
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loss
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 productivity.
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for
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others advocate the opinion that
climate
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 change is
the
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a
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 thing that can not be avoided by all companies.
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 of
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blaming
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 many downsides over it, the company could
work
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 innovatively. To
ilustrate
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illustrate
, when the disaster often
come
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comes
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 in
wet
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 season and it affects many companies to
work
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at
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office
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. It is a new challenge for them to create something new
such
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 as providing a
work
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 application that
allow
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employee
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the employee
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 to do
job
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their job
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 everywhere. I do agree with
this
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 idea, as it can be beneficial for their company.
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, an application that they create can be sold to
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other communities and be a new market income.
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, many disasters
come
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that come
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 from the rapid change of
climate
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 are really detrimental
for
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to
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 global business.
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, if
public
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the public
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 can see the opportunity over
this
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 condition it will be
usefull
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useful
 and gives them a new way to benefit
it
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from it
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.
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