You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. . explain why you would like the job . give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ . say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to a post that you published in the "Daily Life" magazine one week ago. I would love to be considered for the position you are looking to fill because I adore working with kids. Back in Argentina, I spent almost every day going to my sister's house and helping her to take care of my niece. I

also

consider that Australia has a lot of beautiful outdoor spaces, which I love to go and visit with your kid. One thing I believe

that is

important for you to know is that I worked as a teacher in a primary school for 6 years teaching kids from first grade, so I think

this

could be a great asset for you to have someone who can give your kid an extra help in the case is need it.

To conclude

with my letter, which I do not want to make it long, I would like to say that I came to

this

country 2 months ago to discover their many options

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beaches.

Due to

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, during my days off, I would like to travel around the territory and look at what I might find. I look forward to a prompt response, Yours faithfully, Nicolas Arratta

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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