The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Salmon
begin life as eggs on a pebbly riverbed, hidden among reeds in the slow-moving upper reaches of a river. After five to six months the eggs hatch into “fry”. For approximately the next four years, these baby
salmon
will live in the lower,
fast flowing
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waters of their river. During
this
time they measure between three and eight
centimeters
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in length. By the time
salmon
reach twelve to fifteen
centimeters
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, they are termed as “smolt” and at
this
time they migrate
further
downriver into the open sea. After five years at
sea
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the
salmon
will have grown to adult size, which is between seventy and seventy-six
centimeters
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. They
then
begin swimming back to their birthplace, where they will lay their eggs, and the cycle starts anew. In summary,
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salmon
passes through three distinct physical stages as it grows to maturity. Each of these stages takes place in a very different aquatic location. It is noteworthy that the first two stages of
this
fish’s life occur in a freshwater environment,
while
the third stage is lived in saltwater.
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