the chart below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant

the chart below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 .  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant
The given pie charts compare the
ages
of the
population
of two countries Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and their figure
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
the year 2050. The
ages
population
are separated into three categories :0-14
years
, 15-59
years
and more than 60
years
.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that in both countries , the number of people who are in their 15s-59s is expected to increase
in
Change preposition
by
show examples
50
years
later
Rephrase
apply
show examples
,
whereas
the group of people over 60
years
old make up the largest proportion of
two
Correct article usage
the two
show examples
pie charts. Looking at the pie charts in more detail , in 2000, there was 46.3%
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
the number of 15-59
ages
’s
population
in Yemen, compared to 61,6% of that number in Italy.The figure of people who are 15-59
years
old is anticipated to go up in the future , with 53.1% in total ,
whereas
there has been a slight decrease in the proportion of the 15-59
ages
in Italy in 2050. In terms of the 0-14
years
old group , a small proportion of 3,6% was witnessed in the
ages
of the populations of Yemen in 2000 and
this
data continues to experience a marginal increase in the following 30
years
.A similar tendency was seen in the percentage of 60+
ages
in
italy’s
Change the capitalization
Italy’s
show examples
population
, but it is predicted to rise significantly in the future , from 24,1% to 42,3 % .In the meantime , the percentage of
yemen’s
Change the capitalization
Yemen’s
show examples
ages
and
Italy’s
Change noun form
Italy
show examples
age
Wrong verb form
aged
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
0-14
years
is expected to undergo a slight downward trend in the future , from over a half to exactly 37 % and nearly a quarter to 11.5% respectively.
Submitted by bobong120906 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ages, population, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: