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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibility. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibility
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Undoubtedly,
business
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 is
vital
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 part of any nation. It is totally undeniable that
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business
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businesses
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 should give
alot
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a lot
 to
the
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society
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 back rather than just focus on profit and with
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i
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 show my agreement to
large
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a large
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 extent. To Commence with,
Corporate
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 world are increasing day by day and the reason behind
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 is the people or consumers who are the king in any
business
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,
therefore
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 it is
responsibility
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 of every
business
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 to give back good to their culture
by
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 different ways.
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;
loyality
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loyalty
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honesty
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and honesty
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 are
good
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a good
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way
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ways
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 to contribute
in
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 social responsibilities.
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,good ethics are really very important in
business
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.
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 to
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, the employees or workers of any
business
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are
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also
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 give
plethora
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 to their company to grow so in return because they are a part of
society
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 so without any
doubt
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 the problems of the workers should always be the unignored issue to be solved because through the comfortable and friendly
enviroment
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environment
 not only
business
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 makes money but
also
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 good and long-term relations to grow.
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, Google always
take
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 care of its employee as their responsibility.
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, Corporation does need to do extra for
soviety
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society
 because
itself
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it gives too much to
society
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 through different services. whether every
business
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 runs because of profit still with the notion to grow it always
try
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 to give
their
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 best for
society
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.
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, with the notion that every action has
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an eual
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eual
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equal
 reaction
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business
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businesses
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sholud
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should
 always do best for the
ountry
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country
 and its folks as they help to grow. I am in favour of
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this
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 concept that
society
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 and
business
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 both are
important
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an important
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part
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parts
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 of every nation
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