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The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms).

The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms).
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The line graph illustrates information about provides of
technologys
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technologies
technology
 like CD and
DVD
player
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players
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, mobile
phone
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phones
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 and internet connection in homes in Great Britain, over a period of 14 years from 1994 to 2008.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that provides of CD players in homes from the first year went up till
exatly
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exactly
moment
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,
howeve
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however
,
DVD
 players and
internet
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the internet
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 by far increased.
In contrast
,
pattern
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the pattern
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 of access
of
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to
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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undergone
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has undergone
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 huge changes, like a rise and a fall. In 1994 and 1995 provides of CD players was around
a
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apply
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45
percent
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per cent
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,
however
, only 1 year later in 1996 mobile
petterns
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patterns
pattern
 of access’s percentage reached approximately 18
percent
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per cent
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.
DVD
player
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players
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 since 2002 had a rapid
surgue
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surge
surged
 to almost 80
percent
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per cent
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 and continued with gradually increase to more 85
percent
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per cent
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 Between
years
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the years
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 2005 and
2006
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,2006
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 the number of
DVD
 player users exceeded to amount of houses owning
of
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mobile phones and reached around 80,
then
number
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the number
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 of mobile users was steady till the end of
period
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the period
a period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dvd, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • digital divide
  • accessibility
  • ubiquitous computing
  • smart home devices
  • telecommunication
  • multi-purpose gadgets
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • obsolete
  • trend analysis
  • consumer electronics
  • statistical data
  • percentile growth
  • demographics
  • chart interpretation
  • gadgets
  • integration
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