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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie charts illustrate the difference in
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Energy
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the Energy
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Production
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 field of France in 1995 and 2005. There are five parts in
diagrams
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the diagrams
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: gas, coal, petrol, nuclear and others.
Overall
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, there were no significant changes over the 10-year period. Gas and coal had the biggest parts and together
were
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accounted for more than half of the
energy
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production
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 in both years. At the same time, nuclear and other kinds of
energy
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 sources stayed as the least important. Coal
production
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 changed marginally with just a 1
percent
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per cent
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 increase from 29.8% in 1995 to 30.93% in 2005. Gas had an even worse growth with
mere
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 0.5% of raise in 10 years, it generated 29.63% in
first
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the first
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 year and 30.31% in 2005.
According to
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 the remaining kinds of
energy
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production
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, there was
near
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nearly
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 a two times growth in nuclear and other sources with 10.10% and 9.10% respectively in 2005. On the opposite, petrol was the only kind of
energy
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 that became smaller, it dropped from 29.27% to 19.55% in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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