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The map show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The three maps illustrate how
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village
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the village
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 of Meadowside and the
town
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 of
Fronton
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 have changed over three different time periods (1962,1985 and now)
Overall
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,
Meadowise
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village
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 increased in size and become
Meadowise
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 suburbs. After some
changes
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,changes
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this
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territory
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were
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was
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 joined.
Furthermore
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, the territories have developed and new infrastructure
have
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has
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 emerged. In 1962, both territories were
separately
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separated
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 without
a
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apply
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roads and
railway
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line
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lines
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 behind
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this
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these
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 two
area
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areas
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.
Town
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Fronton
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 had only one
railway
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line
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 from east to north,
as
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at
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 the same time
Meadowise
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village
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 located on
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west
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the west
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from
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of
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Fronton
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 had only one
road
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 running through the entire
territory
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 from
the
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west
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 to north. By 1985, was big grown in
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village
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the village
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Meadowise
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of Meadowise
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 and in
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town
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the town
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Fronton
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of Fronton
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. The small
road
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 across
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village
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the village
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 become the main
road
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 and
joined
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is joined
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 with
new
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a new
the new
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 part of
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road
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the road
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 which run to
Fronton
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 in
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west
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the west
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.
Likewise
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,
Meadowise
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village
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have
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has
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 developed a
house
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housing
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 estate in the east, a leisure complex in the north and
big
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a big
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 supermarket under roads in the south of
this
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territory
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. Nowadays
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Meadowise
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Meadows
 is a suburb and
this
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territory
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 and
Town
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Fronton
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 are joined.
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Railway
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The railway
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line
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 runs from
Fronton
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 have extended and
new
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the new
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line
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 runs through the
west
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 to
new
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the new
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railway
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 station which is have been built. The north
from
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of
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 the station a hotel
have
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has
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 been created and the south
from
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of
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station
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the station
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 under the
road
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 is
new
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a new
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 large business park
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, town, fronton, meadowise, territory, railway, line, west, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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